You will practise structured revision on a real piece of writing and track what each round changed.
You now have the pieces from this module. Lesson 4.1 had you read a first answer against your brief, lesson 4.2 turned vague notes into quoted, reasoned feedback, and lesson 4.3 covered what to do when a conversation goes wrong. This exercise puts them in order on one real piece of writing, and has you save every version so you can see what each round actually changed.
Pick something you need to write anyway, between about 150 and 500 words: a client email, an internal announcement, a short proposal section, a bio, a job ad. It should matter enough that you would normally edit it carefully. Set aside about twenty-five minutes.
Write a complete brief with context, task, constraints and format, as you practised in module 1. Run it in a fresh chat. Copy the first draft into a document and label it version 1.
Marcus, the account manager from earlier in this module, used this exercise on a notice to all his firm's clients about a weekend system upgrade. Clients would lose access to the support portal from Saturday 10pm to Sunday 6am, and the helpdesk phone line would stay open. His brief named the readers (office managers at small firms, most not technical), the purpose (no one should be surprised on Saturday night), the limit (under 200 words) and the format (subject line and body).
Each round has one job. Keeping to the order matters, because fixing wording before the structure is settled means polishing sentences that may be cut later.
Round one fixes structure and content. Is everything that must be there present, in the right order, with nothing wrong or invented? Marcus's version 1 buried the outage times in the third paragraph and never said the phone line stayed open. His feedback: "The outage times are the one thing every reader needs, and they are in paragraph three. Put the day and times in the first sentence. Also add that the helpdesk phone line stays open throughout, because clients will want to know they can still reach us. Change nothing else." That gave him version 2.
Round two fixes tone. Does it sound right for this reader and this relationship? Version 2 apologised three times. His feedback: "The draft apologises three times, which makes a routine upgrade sound like a problem. Keep one short apology, in the line about the portal, and remove the others. Change nothing else." That was version 3.
Round three fixes length and wording. Is it within the limit, with no clumsy phrases or jargon? Version 3 was 240 words and used "scheduled maintenance window" twice. His feedback: "Cut it to under 200 words by shortening the paragraph about why we are upgrading, since readers care more about the impact than the reasons. Replace 'scheduled maintenance window' with plain words such as 'the upgrade'. Change nothing else." That was version 4.
Each round gets one or two instructions, each with the quoted part or the named section, and a reason. That is the discipline from lesson 4.2, Feedback that gets a better second draft, and this exercise is where it becomes a habit.
If you notice something outside the current round's job, write it down and save it for the right round. A typo spotted in round one can wait until round three. If you notice a missing fact in round three, that is a sign round one was rushed, so put it in your record.
If the draft stops improving and starts going in circles, use what you learnt in lesson 4.3: edit your brief or move to a fresh chat with a short summary, then carry on with the round you were on.
You are aiming for a draft you would be happy to send. Perfection can wait. Many pieces are usable after two rounds, and you should stop there if yours is. Others need all three, and a few need a fourth for one stubborn line. Note how many rounds it took. Over several pieces, that number tells you where your briefs are weakest: if round one always has a lot to fix, your context or constraints need work before you start.
Marcus stopped after three rounds. Version 4 was 182 words, opened with the times, mentioned the phone line, apologised once and used plain words. He changed one word by hand and sent it.
Your document should contain four versions of the same piece, in order, with the feedback you gave between each one. At the end, add one sentence on which round improved it most and why. For Marcus it was round one: moving the times to the first line made more difference to his readers than anything about tone or length.
Seeing four versions side by side is the point of keeping them all. It shows you how much a single well-aimed instruction can do, and it gives you feedback lines you can reuse. Choose the piece you will work on, and write the brief for version 1.
Save all four versions of the draft with your feedback between each, and write one sentence on which round improved it most.
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